Two minutes of the most pure and unadulterated happiness followed by seven years of hurt,
For the fifteen minutes I spent laughing, fell countless tears on the dirt
For all the moments I floated above the ground, I spent several more in pain
The amazing six weeks we had, the rest all were spent in a haze
For the clarity and the hope you gave me, you went away with all my faith
The ten seconds of euphoria turned into an eternity of hate
The one day of longing we had; it broke me along the way
You made me the woman I am and yet you took it all away
For the tender moments you showed and all the darkness that it became
That one kiss we stole together was followed by many heart wrenching screams
The tingling heat you introduced me to, along with the eons of distress
For that one night of love we made, you sent me to my grave....
77 comments:
Are you alright ?I hope you are...
You talk in such a paradoxical language..BTW - is it a poem fest or something ? everyone talking in poems and I stand here as a complete idiot not getting a thing.. ??
However, lines to talk of beautiful yet painful paradoxes...Each one of experiences things on these lines I guess...You got me nostalgic !
@ Mishra
I'm okay! It isn't really a poem. Just paradoxes which rule life. And just because poetry isn't your cup of tea, doesn't mean that you are an idiot! It means you are different! And that difference makes you the best around here! :)
Cheers. ^_^
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oie .. and heres some thing to eay ur brains .. 20/04/2006 ...
hmm may be this will help . ... 08/06/2006
>:D<
"The tingling heat you introduced me to, along with the eons of distress
For that one night of love we made, you sent me to my grave...."
btw hey wht was this poem about ....u have put it neatly ....but y so sad
u have made it simple but its sad
just loved the way u have potrayed your poem and YES i do believe love seems to be incomplete without its soreness/pain.
great write up!! well i am a new kid on this blog .have added u in my list.
@ Joel
Awwww..... Thank you for all those hugs!!
>:D< * infinity for you!! :) Mwah!
@ Solitary Writer
This isn't really a poem.. Just random paradoxes that govern relationships..!
@ Crazzy Lazzy (funky name!!)
Thank you and thank you again! hope to see you here more often! :)
Oh beautiful !!!
I just completely - absolutely - totally loved this piece girl..!
So damn true, and you versed to well...
Awesome !
@ Cinderella
Thank you!!
beutiful.. absolutely loved it... bt why is everybody going so sad.. :(
Those are some pretty powerful words there.
I'll be thinking about it all day...
Wow Beautifully written ....
how I wish I could write like u ...
btw that was posted at 2 am...
did u sleep well after writing something painfull as that or is it the case that u never sleep peacefully !!! :P
ok ok...I wont call you wily banter if you dont like it...is it ok now...i cant use any punctuations because the stupid SHIFT key is not working...hence no smileys,brackets or questions marks....darn...
good poetry...still no exclamatory marks....gaaaaah...
Scribblers Inc.
Can relate this poem very well to myself..... The most recent encounter of mine in a relationship for me :(
But then you have to keep going and thats what i keep on telling to myself...
I would like to ask you something on a similiar note..
IN a relationship if 1 person leaves another for some one else or due to bla bla reasons.. we call it a break up....
But what will you name a relationship in which two people are no more together and still both are crying and blessing each other, for each other.????
impressive:)
liked the contrast in each line
well written
keep it rollin;)
Hmmm...
You okay na?
Btw, I liked your reply to Mishra's comment!
one heck of a piece of poetry that is n i mean that in a complimentary way:)
on a serious note...no one should be allowed so much significance in life to break u in such a way.
btw...awesome closing line *deafening applause*
@ Swayam
Thank you!
@ Mihir
Coming from you that is a BIG compliment! :)
Lemme know what conclusions you finally came to!
@ Anurag
Thank you!
We Engineers never sleep at normal times! I changed my blog template after I finished the post! Slept at 5! Just to let you know!! ;)
@ Scribbler's Inc.
Arre, no problem! Call me whatever you want! :P
Do get back, though; when the shift key works! And did both the shift keys stop functioning simultaneously??!! ;)
@ Rushabgandhi
This isn't personal! Just paradoxes faced by people!
As far as your question goes, I call that relationship the difficult after effects! Hope you sort out your issues soon. Take care.
@ Sutta
Yes, I'm fine. :)
And I think Mishra liked it too! =P
@ Scribbler
Thank you. And welcome to my blog! :)
@ Comfortably numb
Thank you! And thank you some more!
Life is full of paradoxes.We just have to move around them.
Nice lines!
pah!!
paranoid society!!
gotta live with it
so now that we have established that dita is completely fine and in a sound state of mind, lets get ahead with things!
dita, this has to be the most brilliant piece you have ever written... the words actually transcend the pain to the reader....painful...yet beautiful :)
mmuah!
oh and also >>::DD<<
hugs baby >:D<
life is gonna b better...for sure!! n dat is d truth and nothing else!
:D
hey that was real beautiful..i love the way you composed the poem, so elegant..so poignant..normally poems with numbers and maths, i really don't get..but this was real nice...
keep writing..profound and pure..
Vyo
Nice piece ;)
But i feel emotions are very transient and momentarily.....
If you say eternity of pain or hate...I think it's not practically possible.
@ Sameera
Thank you :)
@ Friendly Nextdoor guy
We all are living with it! :)
@ Isha
Thats the best compliment ever! Thank you so much!! Mwahhhh!!
@ Gunj
Thank you...
Lots of hugs straight back to you! :)
@ Vyzz
Welcome to my blog! :) Thank you. :)
@ Enigma
Emotions are always momentary! It is just that I chose to portray it the way I have done! Poetic license! =D
Thank for dropping by, hope to see you around here more often! :)
Whew! That was beautiful!! Enigmatic and yet softly ironic. Me SO likey!!
@ macadamia
Gracias! And welcome to my blog! :)
**You made me the woman I am and yet you took it all away
this post reminds me of a song...
dil ko dhadkna tumne sikhaya...dil ko tadapna tumne sikhaya...aankhon mein aasoon chupe the kahin...inko jhalakna tumne sikhaya..
its got d same intensity...infact more...passionate...hurt...desire...pain
**For that one night of love we made, you sent me to my grave....
brilliant!!!
tat was unflinchingly the best altercation of te mind taht i've seen babe.. i'm lik "wowww" if this is fiction! n :(:( if it's in the realm of reality..
neways i guess this happens to all ofus, at sum point or the other.. so this is as real as it gets..
beautifully depicted!!
It real good.
My sir once told me...poetry is just a spontaneous flow of emotions.U alrite?
You should have done some course in creative writing in US or some place...u r amazing.
@ Mayz
Hmmm... I haven't heard of the song before but the words are very strong and very powerful! Will Google it up...
And thank you! :)
@ Rantravereflect/Jane said...
I guess that was fiction but it has obvious inspiration from reality! Thank you! :)
@ Chirantan
I'm good, thanks for asking! =D
And, I did seriously consider creative writing as a profession but Engineering seemed like a more lucrative deal back then! I still regret! =P
Thank you for that compliment! One of the best I have received so far! :)
amazing poetry !! your eloquence is unmatched .. one of the most worked upon blogs i have seen till date ... nice effort .. keep going and keep visiting my blog . :D
@ Ankur Kakkar
Thank you!! Ohh... Don't worry! I will be visiting your blog often enough1 =P
Lovely blog....fabulous poem...I haven't read anything as wnderful as this bfr...speaking frm the heart....this was the most unique...one-of-it's-kind....and really touching!
Love ur space....will be visiting often!
@ Meghana
Thanks girl! Hope to see you here more! :)
Everything is well buddy.
Just trying to catch what should have been gripped hard close to heart.
My Career !!!
Nice artwork.
Take care,
(liked the way someone cares in the virtual world. )
speechless at the pain reflecting from the words...just beautifully..written...
I wonder though why you have put a childs pic here for the poem...?!
@ big Omi
Well, nice to know that you are doing good! :) It is a shame that your colleagues are still giving you trouble! Take care!
@ UTP
Thank you!! :)
@ Cinderella
The child's pic was going well with the previous title I had thought of! I loved the picture and retained it, even though I changed the title! :)
I can smell some soreness in here and then there is some exaltation.
I can at ease lie to you but I don't think you need it. Life will be just the same tomorrow or maybe worse.The same things will be repeated and you will be put to these same trials all over. But the moment you realize that, it's gonna get so much better Its really gonna be. The way you will feel will be like something youve never felt before. :)
I know its something which is not directly related to the post but then its important.
Cheers!
@ Comfortably Numb
Love the fact that you didn't lie to me! And I appreciate it!
:)
LOL why would I even consider a lie :P
Muchly appreciated....eh? :P
Have a nice time and I hope tomorrow is a better day if at all you think about what I said. Anyways I'm all about crap. Joblessness gives birth to a unique mix of crap and boredom...
@ Comfortably numb
You and your amazing poems are all about crap?? Ohh.. Stop undermining yourself! And your joblessness reflects on your blog! So, yeah, no ennui from what I see!! :P
You and your amazing poems...So that means I am not amazing :x
:P
Who in the right mind and having a job is.....
1. Online at 1 33 in the mornin
2. Not doing anything
And yea idk why but your blog wasnt letting me post comments..:P So I immed you on yahoo lol..Height of joblessness!
You made me the woman I am and yet you took it all away: kya baat hai...wah wah... mera kuch samaan tumhare paas pada hai.....almost reminds me of that...
Erm... I'm not sure I want to reply to that! Maybe you didn't get the hint behind the lines!
wow lovely post...came from the heart..
This poem was brilliant. My favourite line "You made me the woman I am and yet you took it all away". I love the picture. Such innocence.
@ Hemanth Potluri
Thank you :)
@ Tairebabs
Thanks dear. Hope to see you here more! :)
oh!!! wat a poem!!!... picture of tat cute kid made it so attractive n touching...keep writing...
P.S: do visit my blog wen u find time
This was cool, loved it because the intensity was furious. Either this side or that, each fibre gave in what it was worth of it...
Glad that I chanced in...
Cheers
W-R-I-T-E!
ah, awesome gal....first time here but enjoyed reading some of yur posts...
Thanks for stopping by at mine....
Ur a brialliant writer!
**For the clarity and the hope you gave me, you went away with all my faith
I could so relate to that...
Keshi.
brings to my mind one of my quotes....
When life pushes you so hard that you struggle to breathe; when it gets way too demanding and there is no one you can share it with, don't worry! You are only getting better. In the end, it is the man's character that counts. So cheer up and be happy. I am happy :-)
and i just posted it today :-D
anyway,
one writes best when in pain. The despairity makes it all so ruthless.. Intense post!
Beautiful!
The hurt is so evident that i can almost touch(?) it.
:)
K
-www.ktens.com
@ Rajesh
Welcome! And thank you!! :) Will drop by soon enough! :)
@ Prabhu Datta Das
Thank you! :) And glad you visited too! Hope to see you here more often!
@ Sutta
Will do soon enough, just a little busy preparing for my GRE. Lots to do!!
@ Princess Mia
Thank you! Hope to see you around more often! :)
@ Keshi
Thank you! :)
@ Wanderlust
Welcome to my blog. I'm happy! Very happy in fact! That poem is not regarding me! =P J
just paradoxes which came to me head one very jobless day!!
@ K10
Thank you and thanks for dropping by! :)
hmm..how much did you give to write that? oh! mirror mirror on the wall...
did you call?
who is the fairest of all?
pain is in shame
and life is in vain,
for a moment's gain,
i played the life's game...
awww... I must say really beautiful and so true.. :)
btw, where are you based in??
@ Vishesh
How much did I give what? What are you imploring???
@ Shrav
Thank you. I'm based in Mumbai! :)
i mean how much you went through to write that :) there seems to be lots of emotions behind it ;)
@ Vishesh
I didn't have to think much! It was like a two minute ka effort! :)
Oh My god....for some reason it feel like u have penned down exactly wts on my mind...
Loved it :-)
Hope it has nothing to do with you, like u said
the last line was...umm intriguing....
@ Divkiran
Thank you!
@ Arvind
Like I said, it doesn't! :)
@ Vishv
:) :) :)
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